tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320959265040712836.post1701705573787566985..comments2023-04-05T03:12:29.259-05:00Comments on I, Rodius: WretchedI, Rodiushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08199985322178825076noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320959265040712836.post-69511114089502803812012-03-02T05:36:57.197-06:002012-03-02T05:36:57.197-06:00It's great having you back regularly, I, Rodiu...It's great having you back regularly, I, Rodius. This is a great little vignette and so what if the comma has been brutally abused (for the record, I don't think it has at all). The piece is packed with emotion and is really well written. Hopefully see you at the weekend.Trifectahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16492626287830278024noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320959265040712836.post-69114365013170057902012-02-29T22:42:37.446-06:002012-02-29T22:42:37.446-06:00It's kind if cloyingly depressing, and I mean ...It's kind if cloyingly depressing, and I mean that as a compliment. It's the kind of "not love" that, after reading about it, I want to shake it off, I don't want it sticking to me. Infecting my relationships. Good work here.Nicole Leigh Shawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02042126240711460836noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320959265040712836.post-54421874561964651272012-02-29T13:18:05.956-06:002012-02-29T13:18:05.956-06:00Thanks for the feedback. I disagree that "wre...Thanks for the feedback. I disagree that "wretched" is an adverb in this context. The sentence is essentially "the state is wretched." Since "state" is a noun, wretched is an adjective.<br /><br />Fair enough on the split infinitive.<br /><br />I wrote the "this is not" sentence first without the repetition, but I thought it was confusing. Because the idea is to fill each sentence with modifying phrases,so many words come between "this is not" and "the love" that I changed it to make the sentence easier to read.I, Rodiushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08199985322178825076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320959265040712836.post-29431433644125357402012-02-29T10:25:56.156-06:002012-02-29T10:25:56.156-06:00I don't mind in the least your wooing of the c...I don't mind in the least your wooing of the comma in your poignent piece of imprisoning love, which engulfs one to the point of self-identity loss. Au contraire! It seems to add to the desperate emotional tone of this. <br />.<br />The only thing I recomment is not to separate "How can it <b>not</b>" from the word "<b>encourage</b> her"; change the split infinite from "to slowly fall apart" to "to fall apart slowly"; eliminate the double use of "this is not" in the same sentence; and cross your fingers the judges didn't notice you used "wretched" as an adverb instead of an adjective (because it's an enticing use of the word "wretched" - I like it).Celeste Neumannhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06121686507934885254noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320959265040712836.post-68285936936844526152012-02-28T23:39:19.604-06:002012-02-28T23:39:19.604-06:00Codependency at its worst. Your description is per...Codependency at its worst. Your description is perfect.<br />http://jesterqueen.comJester Queenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10441806535770013592noreply@blogger.com