At the window, not looking down, the boundless roar filled
my ears. Heat, like hands against my back, pushed me forward. I saw blue sky. She
squeezed my hand. We started to count.
I was going for "leaping from a burning building," but I guess I didn't quite pull it off with just 33 words. But the story is as much in the reader as in the writer. Thanks, y'all.
Are they sky diving?
ReplyDeleteI have always wanted to sky dive. Well written.
ReplyDeleteOoo I like the imagery.
ReplyDeleteWell written. Almost felt like I could hear the roar of the plane. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteYou've got some great descriptions - I especially like the heat like hands on his back.
ReplyDeleteI could really picture this. Thought it was great.
ReplyDeleteWell done, but it sounds like 9/11 in the towers to me.
ReplyDeleteI was going for "leaping from a burning building," but I guess I didn't quite pull it off with just 33 words. But the story is as much in the reader as in the writer. Thanks, y'all.
ReplyDeleteI was hoping against hope they somehow had bungee cords attached but I suppose not. Quite vivid.
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