“What I tell you three times is true.” I am relieved to hear
steadiness in my voice and I hope that it sounds like strength. I have no doubt
the obscure literary reference will go right over his head. He doesn’t look to
me to be a well-read man. Still, he has a habit of holding eye contact far too
long. It’s just a tactic, I tell myself, a way to make it look like he sees far
more than he possibly could. Knowing that, it’s still unnerving.
“Say it as many times as you want,” he answers. His voice is
deep and flat, like a drum in a sound-proof room. “It’s still not going to work.”
I see the dirt under his nails, impossibly black. I try not to speculate on the
jagged scar that slices across the right side of his neck, but I can’t help
myself. A knife? A rope? “You’ve never done this kind of job before.” It wasn’t
a question.
“Well…” I drag the word out, feeling a stammer coming on. I
swallow. “I’m still in charge of this thing.” I know I should let silence speak
for me. I should turn with the confidence that he will follow, but my mouth
keeps chattering on without me. “That’s what I was hired for. I’ve got the
technical knowledge. The education. That’s why he put me in charge. If you’ve
got a problem with that, we can call him right now.”
He doesn’t laugh, at least. But he never drops his eyes. His
right hand hangs in a fist, like a stone at the end of a maul. He runs his left
hand slowly down his right cheek, his little finger brushing the line of that
awful scar. “You don’t look much like a Bellman to me,” he says, and my heart
and my stomach change places. “Not a Butcher, either.” His eyes move down at
last, then up again, slowly. “No,” he says. “A Beaver. Definitely a Beaver.”
8 comments:
His right hand hangs in a fist, like a stone at the end of a maul.
Great descriptions and story!!
Great details -- that guy makes me nervous! Interesting that he picks up the reference at the end and turns it around.
Wow. So the guy is going to be hunting our persona here and making him nervous and unsuccessful.
Thanks, y'all. He makes me nervous, too.
I have not read "The Hunting of the Snark." I'm sure once I do, I'll understand the bellman, baker, and beaver references. :) I have the story pulled up now. Thanks for the lead-in.
Such strong details! Congrats on your 2nd place!
Congrats on the win. You've created an unnerving character, with some darn good phrasing in there.
Thank you! Now I have to write another one?? :)
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