Friday, October 12, 2012

On the Count of Three...

For Trifextra:

At the window, not looking down, the boundless roar filled my ears. Heat, like hands against my back, pushed me forward. I saw blue sky. She squeezed my hand. We started to count.

9 comments:

Zoe Childs said...

Are they sky diving?

Bo said...

I have always wanted to sky dive. Well written.

Draug said...

Ooo I like the imagery.

Tom MacInnes said...

Well written. Almost felt like I could hear the roar of the plane. Nicely done.

jannatwrites said...

You've got some great descriptions - I especially like the heat like hands on his back.

mairzeebp said...

I could really picture this. Thought it was great.

Kevin said...

Well done, but it sounds like 9/11 in the towers to me.

I, Rodius said...

I was going for "leaping from a burning building," but I guess I didn't quite pull it off with just 33 words. But the story is as much in the reader as in the writer. Thanks, y'all.

karen said...

I was hoping against hope they somehow had bungee cords attached but I suppose not. Quite vivid.

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